beta readers needed please.

Hi
I'm at the stage were I need to find some beta readers for my thriller/suspense 'The Deadly Caress' before I self-publish. I'm happy to return the favour.

I need you to read my story and give me some feedback. I'm happy to pay you if that's what it takes.

Please email me at olga990@yahoo.com.au. Put in the subject line: beta reader 'Deadly Caress'.

Thanks.

Book picture by Pavel Guzenko

Amanda Blake sets out to find her mother’s murderer. She gets more than she bargained for and becomes a target herself.

Amanda BLAKE, a freelance photographer, discovers she has been adopted and seeks out her natural mother Jean CAMPBELL in California. When it becomes evident that her mother has been murdered, Amanda sets out to discover her mother’s killer. Her quest takes her back to Sydney to see the man who she thinks holds the answer to the killer’s identity. While visiting this man, she has to run for her life as a hail of gunshots pockmark the walls and shatter the windows. Someone will stop at nothing till she is dead. If she thought things were bad enough, they are about to get much worse...

The Deadly Caress is complete at 80,000 words

Editing again

I finished another edit of this story. The best thing is that I haven't looked at this story for years so I am not attached to it anymore. I was ruthless with cutting out things that didn't work and sentences that I had loved before. I also looked at my writing blog to ensure that I was mindful of the points I had raised.

I have sent it off to someone who's offered to do a critique for me. I hope   the don't find it too bad.

Quandary with a chapter

Hi

I've finished another edit of this story incorporating all the points Victoria brought up. I didn't quite do the 100 pages per week last week but by days end on Monday it was done.

Now I'm concentrating on scene settings and descriptions.

I had a quandary with one chapter as Victoria said that she was worried it wouldn't be allowed. So I put it to my facebook group and authonomy and got some replies. Facebook prosecuting attorney said it's unusual but he can't see why it can't be done as long as the accused is Marandized. So it should be okay.
The guy on authonomy said it can't be done. I've let a message for the second guy asking if he's in law enforcement in the US. I'll see what happens from this.
The question was: Can a kidnapping victim interview the accused in jail in California?
I emailed a detective in Montery and he said it could...with a proviso that it would have be a 'pretext call'. The accused and the victim can't be in the same room. The interview would be done via a phone link.
Yipee. I was so relieved that I could have this scene.

Next draft will be dialogue and then I'll send it off to Victoria again and Symn who bravely offered to cast his studied eyes over it too.

half way through an edit on my mystery

Hi

I'm half way through doing an edit on my mystery story. I can't believe how bad some of it was. Still, with Victoria's comments on my punctuation and plot holes I can fix it. My aim is 100 pages per week and I'm on target so far.

Got mail

Hi

I went out to get the mail and guess what I found on my step. My manuscript from my friend Victoria.
She's suggested a heap of changes. When I finish first draft of my fantasy story The Girl In The Mirror, I will get some bum glue, to keep me in my chair, and start editing The Deadly Caress. I hope to have posted some chapters by the end of January.

Olga

Hi

I've started a new blog for The Deadly Caress which is a mystery/suspense with a dash of chick lit thrown in.

 As I finish editing chapters I will be posting them here for comments.

Currently, my manuscript is with my friend who will run her expert eye over the whole story and let me know if it's all crap or worthy of posting here.

Olga